My Suha: An inconsistent, shitty, predatory story

Mr.Blxckie 2.0 March 9, 2021 1:29 am

This is lazy writing at it's finest. Well, let's dive into this snooze fest.

When first starting off the book, we are introduced to Suha and Jiwoon. The introduction. was shitty and bland, though a sol doesn't need to have an elaborate into, there is no hook to reel in the reader besides Suha being a horny dude.

It is established that the romance is going to be between a secretary, and a CEO (or whatever). This should set off red alarms. That sort of dynamic is predatory. One has the power of another, and whether they're happy or not, the Suha will subconsciously be desensitized to any inappropriate advances made by the Jiwoon. The power imbalance does not put them on equal footing, and can lead to an abuse of power, as shown when Jiwoon made many advances on Suha, and even asked Suha's sister to spy on him. The author refuses to comment on the many instances of invasion of privacy.

The author attempts to address the predatory Dynamic, but soon after forgets about it, and paints that one girl Jiwoon was scheduled to be his potential future partner as a villain for recognizing this shitty dynamic.

The plot is just goofy and silly. It's just them having sex, and Jiwoon getting jealous. Though it's okay to have a story centered around sex, this tried to also create a balance in. the beginning between plot and smut, but soon forgot about the "plot" element. The author dipped they're toes into world building for a hot second, expanding on the business side, but then forgot about it soon after they started having copious amount of sex. Now don't give me the bs excuse that "it's just a change in plot direction!" when this "change" happened in chapter 30. Pretty early for a web novel. But even with their attempt to world build, it was a shitty one. I understood nothing, and it felt like the author just connected a bunch of random events together.

On the topic of their love, it feels really forced. There is no romance build up besides "I'm horny for you" which is really fucking stupid if you're trying to make a love story. Even now, the love aspect isn't convincing me. The author keeps confusing love, for horniness.

The author keeps bringing up random characters with no relation to the plot at all when they don't know what to do with their story. Honestly very disappointing and boring read. All they do is have sex, the author is only focused on the sex aspect, so they dropped all the other important elements of the story so they could focus on one thing. Lazy writing.


0/10 plot
0/10 writing style
6/10 art
3/10 consistency

overall score:
2/10

final thought:

A shitty book with lazy writing

Responses
    chlouiav March 9, 2021 4:14 am

    if you don't like it, don't read it then lmao

    chlouiav March 9, 2021 4:17 am

    bold of you to say all of this without knowing what its like to be in their shoes lol

    Mr.Blxckie 2.0 March 9, 2021 4:18 am
    if you don't like it, don't read it then lmao chlouiav

    If you don't like what I'm saying, don't read lol. practice what you preach

    Stan Iwaoi March 9, 2021 8:40 am

    Why take the time to discredit the authors work? I mean ya you don't have to like, but then to write a whole ass review on why you dislike it is a bit much. Just say eh I didn't care for it and move on. "Lazy writing" do you know how much time and effort these authors put into their work??? Some of these authors even stress themselves to the point where they develope serious health issues. Also we are technically on an illegal site, do you really have the right to shit on a story you didn't pay to read nor took the time to upload. This comment was just plain as rude.

    BANSH33 March 9, 2021 9:06 am
    Why take the time to discredit the authors work? I mean ya you don't have to like, but then to write a whole ass review on why you dislike it is a bit much. Just say eh I didn't care for it and move on. "Lazy w... Stan Iwaoi

    Honestly, we are in no obligation to care about an author’s inner conflicts or personal problems. These authors publicly release their content for an audience to follow it. If you are going to get offended with every single critic that is given to -I must suppose- “one of your faves” BL stories, then honestly you would get mad at every single little comment made on the universe. The fact that we read from an illegal website does not put us in a lower position such as to not state our opinions just by the fact of the “author’s hard work” and our supposedly “hypocrisy.” Everyone who solely depends on an audience, must get a accustomed to constant criticism and backlash. In this case, the person is just giving their opinion and even saying why. Most of what you could get from some of the useless crackheads of the internet. I personally used to be more interested in the story as well, but this started becoming boring and baseless in no time. I’ll drop this story, but just wanted to clarify the fact that no one should get offended by criticism. If you do not agree, then we might as well discuss why, simple as that.

    Stardust March 9, 2021 2:06 pm
    Honestly, we are in no obligation to care about an author’s inner conflicts or personal problems. These authors publicly release their content for an audience to follow it. If you are going to get offended wi... BANSH33

    Preach (๑•ㅂ•)و✧

    Stardust March 9, 2021 2:13 pm

    I somewhat agree. I don’t see any chemistry between them either except the 'I'm horny for you' which is pretty illogical even as author showed the director liking Suha since he was a kid. Perhaps the author focused too much on the smut that the story completely went off tracks. Dropped this a while ago ^^

    Stardust March 9, 2021 2:16 pm
    bold of you to say all of this without knowing what its like to be in their shoes lol chlouiav

    I don’t think that's how criticism works. You don’t imagine to be in the character's shoes to criticize a story. If you really want to criticize something well, see it from the author's point of view.

    sho chan March 9, 2021 4:20 pm

    0 % agreed(▰˘◡˘▰)

    Pretty_eyes March 9, 2021 6:21 pm

    I love reading long reviews like this.
    Why can't some people take criticism??
    I've already forgotten what's even happened in this story lol it's so bland
    Almost every stupid BL goes from lust to love (mostly forced)

    AimItLikeIdaho March 9, 2021 6:27 pm
    I love reading long reviews like this. Why can't some people take criticism?? I've already forgotten what's even happened in this story lol it's so bland Almost every stupid BL goes from lust to love (mostly fo... Pretty_eyes

    shounen ai (i think that’s what ya call it) is superior for this reason. all the time writing unnecessary sexual scenes could be put into world building, or giving the main couple more depth!

    Pretty_eyes March 9, 2021 6:39 pm
    shounen ai (i think that’s what ya call it) is superior for this reason. all the time writing unnecessary sexual scenes could be put into world building, or giving the main couple more depth! AimItLikeIdaho

    You're right. I like shounen ai.
    But I also kinda like reading smut. So ig I just want best of both worlds haha

    taejin March 9, 2021 9:23 pm

    i looked at your profile and you just leave negative reviews on stories. lol, do you not have something better to do? i don’t know what you’re going through so i’m not trying to be rude, but you can put your time and energy into something rather than posting these kinds of reviews. you have your own opinion and can do what you please, but just leaving negative comments everywhere isn’t the right thing.

    Mr.Blxckie 2.0 March 9, 2021 9:41 pm
    i looked at your profile and you just leave negative reviews on stories. lol, do you not have something better to do? i don’t know what you’re going through so i’m not trying to be rude, but you can put y... taejin

    Hm? If you look at my Bio, then you'll understand. Seems as if someone didn't read enough. I truly don't care if they're "negative reviews" they're just me reviewing books. Reviewing books any and everywhere is (one) my favorite past time. I don't only do this on Mangago, but I I'll get Better engagement and more stories to review here.
    Simply downvote if you don't like :p

    chlouiav March 10, 2021 3:13 am

    authors spend a lot of effort in making manhwas. if you dont like it, create ur own manhwa lmaooo

    Stardust March 10, 2021 4:30 am
    authors spend a lot of effort in making manhwas. if you dont like it, create ur own manhwa lmaooo chlouiav

    According to your logic no one should ever criticize any work

    mar March 10, 2021 8:15 am

    no one asked

    Pretty_eyes March 10, 2021 10:48 am
    authors spend a lot of effort in making manhwas. if you dont like it, create ur own manhwa lmaooo chlouiav

    Why the can't some people take criticism??
    "If YoU dOn't LIkE iT ThEN DoN't ReAd It!"
    "ThE AutHOr pUt So MuCh wOrK iNtO ThIs"
    "YoU CaN't wRiTE a MaNHwA sO ShuT Up"
    Oh yeah? Let's say I made some crappy phones and am selling it. I put a lot of effort into making it. And you bought one and it doesn't work.
    So what do you do? Go online and leave a review saying it's not good and ask for a refund.
    Then an idiot says: "iF iT's nOt GoOD tHeN WhY DiD yoU bUY it? MiNe WorKs JuST fiNe!"
    If someone does or makes something for others, others are free to critisise or judge it. Asking them to shut up defeats the purpose of free speech.
    Not all criticism has to be constructive and critique does not mean insulting anyone.
    Did you can know you can criticize something _and_ be respectful of it?
    So yeah.
    (I copy pasted my comment here)

    lemon March 10, 2021 3:52 pm
    Why the can't some people take criticism??"If YoU dOn't LIkE iT ThEN DoN't ReAd It!""ThE AutHOr pUt So MuCh wOrK iNtO ThIs""YoU CaN't wRiTE a MaNHwA sO ShuT Up"Oh yeah? Let's say I made some crappy phones and a... Pretty_eyes

    YOU SNAPPED PERIODT

    drenv March 10, 2021 9:09 pm
    I love reading long reviews like this. Why can't some people take criticism?? I've already forgotten what's even happened in this story lol it's so bland Almost every stupid BL goes from lust to love (mostly fo... Pretty_eyes

    Some people can't take criticism because they think that everything must be revolving around their opinions and what they like, in short, hypocrisy and narcissism, as it is not lacking in teenage women ┑( ̄Д  ̄)┍