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3/5
Not much out (30 chap) so I might Change Rating?
MC is smart, the problem is that we, the readers don't see why the sister does what she is doing. The author definitely wants to point this out as MC asks herself, "Why did she do this to me?". We might find out later on, but there are absolutely 0 clues as to why her twin sister does what she does. The author either forgot or its lazy writing. ML falling in love with MC is also really fast paced, you met her then after a week
5/5
Love her
MC knows what shes doing and she is on her way to success. MC leaves her family after ogFl and ogML (her fiance) have an affair, she wishes them good luck and leaves him. Obviously bro is pissy about it, but she doesn't care and opens a Stationery Store for children. The Children (one is ogMLs sister) are on her side and their mini mission is looking for a good bf for her. MC on the other hand is protecting herself and her friends from ogML and her sisters tactics to make her
2/5
Girl what are you doing
MC started out as badass and cool from becoming a literal gang leader after her family abandoned her. She ends up changing the world, quite literally, her gang is practically at the top and well known, yet she is still trying to get ML to be the villain he is 'supposed to be'. Like girl look around you, YOU CHANGED THE NOVEL BY A LOT JUST ADDRESS HIS FEELINGS FOR U. MC later on just becomes uncool then cool then uncool for some chapters.
1/5
Wasted Potential
When I saw that this would be a story about twins I was excited for a two perspective story, SPOILER ALERT: That did not happen. Author at fist, focuses on both the twins where they were in an abused home for a while before finding their family. The author from here just focuses on the FL for the whole story. Not her brother as well, the author just made the brother useless as he has 0 powers and FL has all the powers, twin brother got 0 screen time and no attention.
3/5
Might change rating (26chap out)
MC gets drunk and basically proposes to this "tyrant" emperor and he accepts. ML is shown to might be a regressor which is the only quality that makes him interesting. Other than that the only thing that makes him a tyrant is just "should I just kill___" and we as the readers are supposed to go "omg that's so funny!". Author also keeps stressing MC is smart?? Like pls show not tell us then, because the more she doesn't
4.5/5
An actual protective father
Usually I hate these types of stories with a "protective family" bc they are just obsessed freaks with MC. However this story is very interesting, the father is actually not obsessed with his daughter and cares for his other kids as well! The twin brothers are a different story which is why my rating is 4.5. Both of them really need to have the best redemption arc for what they did to MC. MC has trauma and she shows it. I don't want to spoil, but pls read this!
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